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Chicago Booth Resume Guide--Put Your Most Important Message First  

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Chicago Booth Resume Guide--Put Your Most Important Message First

 

 

Put Your Most Important Message First

 

 

Example 1

This student was a lawyer prior to business school. She wanted to move into corporate strategy roles.

 

? Negotiated settlement of a million dollar lawsuit for less than .5% of the alleged claim.

 

By itself, this bullet has some strong points. Her resume, however, was filled with negotiation experiences. What she really wanted to highlight was strategic thinking. This student stepped back and generated a list of everything that went into this particular project.

All of the following were on her list:

interviewing constituents, conducting factual due diligence, researching case law,  summarizing the legal position of both sides, settling on a legal strategy, persuading clients of the advantages of the proposed strategy, enacting litigation to force the opposing party toward preferring a negotiated settlement to continued litigation, and  negotiating the specific terms of the settlement. Making this list gave her some choices about what to emphasize. She re-wrote the  bullet to emphasize the skill of identifying/creating a strategy or approach.

 

? Devised strategy for minimizing expense and financial risk based on financial and legal analysis resulting in a negotiated  agreement for less than .5% of a million dollar claim.

 

 

 

Example 2

This student worked in private wealth management and wanted to move into consulting.

 

? Provided client service to high net worth individuals and endowments across various asset classes (value, growth, international, emerging markets, fixed income, REITs).

 

“Provided client service” is an umbrella statement that summarizes his whole job. It doesn’t allow the reader to get a full sense of the various skills the student used. By breaking down all that went into client service, the student was able to identify specific skills and experiences that he wanted to highlight.

 

? Developed individualized financial solutions for high net worth clients resulting in client investments of $10M.

o Interviewed high net worth clients to identify financial goals.

o Devised and sold investment strategies and products.

 

 

 

Example 3

This student had a computer engineering background and primarily did coding. He had the following bullet in the “Additional” section of his resume.

 

? Adult Literacy Tutor for Black Cultural Center.

 

There is nothing wrong with this bullet. As is, it demonstrates an interest in people and also community involvement. The student in question, however, had a very technical background and was worried he would be stereotyped as an engineer who lacked people skills. As a result, he was seeking ways to communicate that he did indeed have solid people skills. He turned this bullet which merely describes something he did into a bullet that carried this important message.

 

? Interviewed adult literacy students to assess learning needs, created individualized lessons, and tutored over 20 adults in reading and writing skills.

 

 

 

Example 4

This student worked for an investment and development corporation dedicated to infrastructure projects in Asia. She had the following bullets on her resume.

 

? Planned to establish an international investment fund for national infrastructure projects.

? Provided financing support and financial analysis for utility and transportation projects.

 

This student had volumes of experience working with finances but wanted to send stronger messages concerning problem solving and people skills. Her first bullet refers to a project in which she developed the idea of a single consolidated investment fund. The fund would support a wide range of infrastructure projects in China each of which was, on its own, too small for major financial institutions to consider. Her current language, however, needed work. “Planned” can be a strong and active verb. But “Planned to establish” is vague – it didn’t say much.

 

She created the following revision to emphasize problem solving:

 

? Created and presented novel solution for funding constraints for infrastructure projects. Elicited support from Chinese governmental officials.

? Provided financing support and financial analysis for utility and transportation projects.

 

Her second bullet also needed work. “Provided financing support” is vague and not particularly active. Second, she was not sure she wanted to highlight herself as a “support” person. She decided to drop the idea of serving as a general support person and instead focused on the second half of the bullet – providing financial analysis. She inventoried all the things she did when she analyzed financial projects. One of her roles was modeling. Another was presenting her results and making recommendations. Both of these sent much more useful messages about her as a potential employee.

 

She then crafted a new version:

 

? Created and presented novel solution for funding constraints for infrastructure projects. Elicited support from Chinese governmental officials.

? Modeled multiple financial scenarios for international utility and transportation projects; presented optimal financing scenarios to senior team leaders.

 

Finally, when she looked at the two bullets to consider which carried a more important message and should therefore go first. It was really a matter of judgment and it could be argued either way. The student, however, felt the first bullet was stronger. It represented a specific instance where she had observed a problem, devised a potential solution, and sold the idea to a very difficult audience. Thus she decided to leave the first bullet first.

 

 

 

以上内容摘自:

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